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Ben Moran's avatar

One minor suggestion. When they’re talking about the magnets (plural) the question Tony asks should be “That do what?” instead of “That does what?”.

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His sizeable brown mustache, thick and bushy like a walrus, trebled as he spoke.

Do you mean “trembled” instead of “trebled”?

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