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Evelyn Wojtkowiak's avatar

Did you mean sight?

"The site of Mark at that moment made Jeremy shiver."

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Greg Willits's avatar

Good catch!

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Lisa's avatar

I love this chapter! Very emotional. I had forgotten at first about the kayaking accident and then it hit me. That chapter ending, yikes!

1. …even during the year after Jeremy graduated high school as he… [should be graduated from high school]

2. …for her own parent’s printing company… [should be parents’]

3. The second summer after he graduated high school,… [again, graduated from high school]

4. …their parent’s alma mater. [again, parents’]

5. “Obviously they got that wrong,” said Rose. [should be Rosie]

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Greg Willits's avatar

Great catches. Thanks!

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Sheryl Robinson's avatar

Excited for a new chapter. Not what I expected based on previous chapters. Can’t wait for the next one!

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Greg Willits's avatar

Not what you expected, but hopefully still enjoyable :)

One chapter left in Part 1. This chapter was 90% all new content. I started it focusing on Mark and Rosie and Jeremy just kept coming to the forefront and I saw an opportunity that just makes so much sense for what I know is coming. Plus, I was able to show Rosie and Mark's characters in a short period of time (hopefully) that reflected their ages in this version (in the original they were 5 and 7). Something about this chapter really resonates with me. In fact, all of the re-written content dealing with the LaGrange family constantly surprises me in how it emotionally impacts me personally.

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Sheryl Robinson's avatar

Definitely enjoyed!

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Evelyn Wojtkowiak's avatar

I'm agree Sheryl, totally unexpected.

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