Gordon Hewing sat in the front right pew aisle seat of the First Methodist Church of Burkett.
Good catches. I hate how every time I add a sentence, I introduce a new opportunity for mistakes!
Darn, I was hoping Marie would still be alive!
Couple small things:
1. Just moments before he was attacked behind the gas station down the street from his house.
Personally I would find a comma after “before” to make this sentence a bit more readable and less confusing.
2. The bottom of the tie was now pinched between his fingers as he absent-mindedly and traced over the leaf-like embroidery with his thumbs.
Extraneous “and”
I came here to say the same things (1 & 2). I agree with both.
Also, in the following sentence, I would add a comma and hyphenate dark-blue:
The worst part of his dapper ensemble was the ugly, dark-blue paisley tie.
Good catches. I hate how every time I add a sentence, I introduce a new opportunity for mistakes!
Darn, I was hoping Marie would still be alive!
Couple small things:
1. Just moments before he was attacked behind the gas station down the street from his house.
Personally I would find a comma after “before” to make this sentence a bit more readable and less confusing.
2. The bottom of the tie was now pinched between his fingers as he absent-mindedly and traced over the leaf-like embroidery with his thumbs.
Extraneous “and”
I came here to say the same things (1 & 2). I agree with both.
Also, in the following sentence, I would add a comma and hyphenate dark-blue:
The worst part of his dapper ensemble was the ugly, dark-blue paisley tie.