Gordon Hewing sat in the front right pew aisle seat of the First Methodist Church of Burkett. At the moment, however, he had no idea he was there. Just moments before, he was attacked behind the gas station down the street from his house. Before he passed out, he thought he heard his wife’s voice. But this memory, along with all others, was currently absent from Gordon’s mind.
Good catches. I hate how every time I add a sentence, I introduce a new opportunity for mistakes!
Darn, I was hoping Marie would still be alive!
Couple small things:
1. Just moments before he was attacked behind the gas station down the street from his house.
Personally I would find a comma after “before” to make this sentence a bit more readable and less confusing.
2. The bottom of the tie was now pinched between his fingers as he absent-mindedly and traced over the leaf-like embroidery with his thumbs.
Extraneous “and”