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Good catches. I hate how every time I add a sentence, I introduce a new opportunity for mistakes!

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Darn, I was hoping Marie would still be alive!

Couple small things:

1. Just moments before he was attacked behind the gas station down the street from his house.

Personally I would find a comma after “before” to make this sentence a bit more readable and less confusing.

2. The bottom of the tie was now pinched between his fingers as he absent-mindedly and traced over the leaf-like embroidery with his thumbs.

Extraneous “and”

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I came here to say the same things (1 & 2). I agree with both.

Also, in the following sentence, I would add a comma and hyphenate dark-blue:

The worst part of his dapper ensemble was the ugly, dark-blue paisley tie.

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