“That’s all I’ve got in here, eh?” Frankie said to himself as he stared into the mostly empty refrigerator. He hadn’t had a plain old Miller Lite in what? Thirty years? He grabbed a can, popped it open, and swallowed deeply. “Gah!” he gasped. “Now that ain’t as bad as I remembered.”
I'm also not sure about pompidou vs pompadour. I've always heard the latter in reference to hairstyles and had to look up pompidou. Turns out it's a dude whose pics show slicked back hair, but not really high and pouffy...
I liked this chapter and the focus on a single character.
One suggestion “facades of buildings interspersed yet naturally inserted “. I think you can take out “interspersed yet” - possibly too many adjectives?
I'm also not sure about pompidou vs pompadour. I've always heard the latter in reference to hairstyles and had to look up pompidou. Turns out it's a dude whose pics show slicked back hair, but not really high and pouffy...
1. …for higher-priced beverages mask your desire to eliminate your past”?
Question mark should be before the end quote.
2. Pompidou
I’ve heard of a pompadour, could that be the correct term here?
I am with others WAITING for each new installment of our new friends’ lives. So fun!
I liked this chapter and the focus on a single character.
One suggestion “facades of buildings interspersed yet naturally inserted “. I think you can take out “interspersed yet” - possibly too many adjectives?