As she grew older, somehow Tabitha Small’s ears and cheeks no longer radiated bright pink — almost neon — whenever she was embarrassed, answered a question incorrectly, or when Cissie Sanders publicly accused her of being in love with Ricky Darvish from the other fourth-grade classroom.
1. The clarity of it all was so clear
To me, this sounds awkward: clarity is clear?
2. commiserated with whatever so-called experts
I believe this should be whichever instead of whatever
3. As they pontificated various theories
I believe pontificate does not take an object so you should say “As they pontificated about various theories…”
4. Ten-years-old.
No hyphens, should be: Ten years old.
Another great chapter. I can’t wait to find out how long it takes to get the news to believe her.