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1. He was stuck apparently stuck hundreds of miles away…

Remove first “stuck”?

2. She gently pressed down upon the embossed raised letters of the alphabet with their sharp gold letters.

This is a bit awkward. Embossed and raised have similar meanings. Also, “letters” twice in the sentence.

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You have no idea how many times I've tried to re-write my description of that dang thing and I knew I still didn't get it right :)

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