A pair of hunch-shouldered old men stood on a driveway in the early morning summer, peering with admiration under the hood of what should have been an ancient Dodge Polara that instead now looked practically brand new. The car nearly sparkled. The old men waved at Gordon as he slowly drove past.
I think something may be missing from this sentence. “I think of driving south.”
I hadn’t thought about what everyone will do in this redo. Interesting that the option of changing paths has been presented since in most time travel (which I recognize this isn’t specifically time travel) you are told to try and change as little as possible...
I like Delores’ advice!
One change:
They sat in Delores’ small living room where Rascal was curled up the floor...
... was curled up on the floor...
I think something may be missing from this sentence. “I think of driving south.”
I hadn’t thought about what everyone will do in this redo. Interesting that the option of changing paths has been presented since in most time travel (which I recognize this isn’t specifically time travel) you are told to try and change as little as possible...