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Following Newton’s third law of motion, the second object must exert an equal and opposite force upon the first when an object exerts force on another object.

To me, this sentence sounds very awkward. And very wordy. To be honest, the whole first paragraph is troublesome. The barrel is not pushing against the bullet, the exploding gunpowder is pushing against the bullet and the gun, resulting in the bullet being fired and the gun recoiling (equal and opposite). I see your point in tying it to Olivia’s emotions, but the explanation of the physics of what’s happening is not exactly accurate.

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Logistical questions lined up in her brain queued up and demanding answers:

This sentence seems awkward as well. Maybe:

Logistical questions lined up in her brain, demanding answers:

Or

Logistical questions queued up in her brain and demanded answers:

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