“I can take you out there, but we didn’t have much luck getting too close to one of those things,” Charlie said.
1.
…from under a broad-rimmed hat.
“broad-brimmed” sounds better to me
2.
“Hah,” Charlie laughed. How would you know?”
Missing quotation mark before How.
3.
…an *excursionary exploration*?”
Are asterisks what you intend here? I would suggest:
…an ‘excursionary exploration’?”
4.
“Magnet?” Charlie said, fInally…
To my ear, “Magnets” sounds better than “Magnet.”
1.
…from under a broad-rimmed hat.
“broad-brimmed” sounds better to me
2.
“Hah,” Charlie laughed. How would you know?”
Missing quotation mark before How.
3.
…an *excursionary exploration*?”
Are asterisks what you intend here? I would suggest:
…an ‘excursionary exploration’?”
4.
“Magnet?” Charlie said, fInally…
To my ear, “Magnets” sounds better than “Magnet.”