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…from under a broad-rimmed hat.

“broad-brimmed” sounds better to me

2.

“Hah,” Charlie laughed. How would you know?”

Missing quotation mark before How.

3.

…an *excursionary exploration*?”

Are asterisks what you intend here? I would suggest:

…an ‘excursionary exploration’?”

4.

“Magnet?” Charlie said, fInally…

To my ear, “Magnets” sounds better than “Magnet.”

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