David tottered unsteadily for more than a mile before the thick swath of shadow-laden foliage above him suddenly whisked away to reveal a blazingly hot sun amidst a dark gray sky filled with patches of low, threatening clouds.
1.
Sweat trickled down his brow and alternately fell stinging into his eyes or…
Maybe personal preference but to me it sounds better to say “stingingly” since it’s modifying the verb “fell.”
Or:
Sweat trickled down his brow and alternately fell, stinging, into his eyes or…
2.
Growing up in North Carolina, early Saturday mornings in the Fall were…
The seasons do not need to be capitalized.
3.
But David and Jeremy’s father, Charles LaGrange, had little interest in hunting nor sport of any kind.
I believe the word “nor” is used in conjunction with “neither” or sometimes “not,” so in this case I think it should be “or.”
1.
Sweat trickled down his brow and alternately fell stinging into his eyes or…
Maybe personal preference but to me it sounds better to say “stingingly” since it’s modifying the verb “fell.”
Or:
Sweat trickled down his brow and alternately fell, stinging, into his eyes or…
2.
Growing up in North Carolina, early Saturday mornings in the Fall were…
The seasons do not need to be capitalized.
3.
But David and Jeremy’s father, Charles LaGrange, had little interest in hunting nor sport of any kind.
I believe the word “nor” is used in conjunction with “neither” or sometimes “not,” so in this case I think it should be “or.”