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Thanks for saying that, Matthew. Funny enough, the agent who showed the most interest in this novel kind of threw off progress for several years. She told me if I moved the actual time travel stuff up closer to the beginning, she’d take another look. I played with it on and off for the longest time and it just never felt right. When I started this serialized version, I decided to maintain most of the original chronology I intended, which meant a lot of character development and setups for the first 100+ pages before everything goes wonky. I hate I lost those years of potential progress, but I think that agent was wrong. I like all the build up, even though it’s taking longer to get to the main plot, but I think the emotional payoff will all be worth it.

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I totally forgot that David and Jeremy were the brothers from the kayak chapter until the fast-forward after the birth of the twins. The sudden realization/connection broke. my. heart. Beautifully told. I know this is a sci fi book, but I would be hooked even if it was just a collection of stories about the characters you've introduced so far.

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great chapter! Love the changes from the original. Sorry it took me so long to read it!

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Nice to finally get the back story of David and Jeremy. Looking forward to the next chapter.

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