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Missing quote. buildings. “I don’t like the

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…who’d stumbled upon the smell of baking bread and tomato sauce, sausage and sautéed onions.

I haven’t done an exhaustive search, but it seems like you may prefer the Oxford comma. I’ve seen it elsewhere. If so, then add a comma after “sausage.”

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The air grew more chilled with each step of their spiraling decline.

Personal preference probably, but I prefer “descent” instead of “decline.”

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…as if there was nothing else holding her from falling.

Personal preference again? I prefer “keeping” instead of “holding.”

And oh my gosh, I was not expecting Becca to drug Gordon! What’s happening?!!!

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