“Excuse me,” James said as he approached the television producer at the very edge of Navy Pier.
One minor suggestion. When they’re talking about the magnets (plural) the question Tony asks should be “That do what?” instead of “That does what?”.
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His sizeable brown mustache, thick and bushy like a walrus, trebled as he spoke.
Do you mean “trembled” instead of “trebled”?
One minor suggestion. When they’re talking about the magnets (plural) the question Tony asks should be “That do what?” instead of “That does what?”.
Great work!
Only one comment:
His sizeable brown mustache, thick and bushy like a walrus, trebled as he spoke.
Do you mean “trembled” instead of “trebled”?