Good grief! Here I thought I made it to mid-week so there must not be many typos this week :)
I meant to go look up the rule on splitting dialogue in the middle with a "she said." I typically avoid those situations, but Becca can be a monologuer, so I decided to take that chance. Just couldn't remember the rule from high school English.
Regarding Smalls and Hollander - I just did a global search through the original draft. I apparently could never remember which spelling I decided on for those two. So good catches.
Lastly - I quoted you in the Substack I sent out this morning :)
Thanks for the shout-out in your essay today 😊. I like the part where we get to edit your work because I feel like I’m editing people’s writings all the time (it just comes naturally to me), but rarely can I give feedback that is appreciated. In this case, my suggestions are solicited AND appreciated, not to mention hopefully useful.
I am unsure of your use of the word "penultimate" I know it means next to last, but I'm not sure how it works in the place you used it. I find it a tricky word to use as it sounds like it means the most important and not the next to last.
Anyway, I am enjoying the story and watching your characters come to life.
You have no idea how much this comment simultaneously pleases and confuses me! It pleases me, of course, because you’re enjoying it. It confuses me because this chapter caused me all sorts of grief and in full transparency, I’m still not overly happy with it. So then it pleases me again that you like it even though it’s not my personal favorite chapter thus far. Maybe I need to go back and read it again :)
Oops. Thanks, Greg. This was a tough chapter to edit as I combined two chapters into one during rewrites. I’m certain there will be a few other unintended goofs :)
1. Two brothers setting flight in …taking flight?
2. “As you all know,” she repeated. “This has been a…
should be:
…she repeated, “this has…
3. Hallander should be Hollander
4. “The problem is that until now,” Becca continued, “We’ve been unable…
should be:
…“we’ve been unable…
5. “As you know,” Becca continued. “Using exact temperature controls…
should be:
…Becca continued, “using…
6. “…So tomorrow we begin twelve-hour shifts by teams, eight to eight, seven days a week, at least for the foreseeable future.
Missing end quote after future.
7. Tabitha Smalls should be Small
By the way, even though I’m finding several typos, I am thoroughly enjoying your book! Thanks for the opportunity to read it AND edit (both are fun)!
Good grief! Here I thought I made it to mid-week so there must not be many typos this week :)
I meant to go look up the rule on splitting dialogue in the middle with a "she said." I typically avoid those situations, but Becca can be a monologuer, so I decided to take that chance. Just couldn't remember the rule from high school English.
Regarding Smalls and Hollander - I just did a global search through the original draft. I apparently could never remember which spelling I decided on for those two. So good catches.
Lastly - I quoted you in the Substack I sent out this morning :)
Thanks for the shout-out in your essay today 😊. I like the part where we get to edit your work because I feel like I’m editing people’s writings all the time (it just comes naturally to me), but rarely can I give feedback that is appreciated. In this case, my suggestions are solicited AND appreciated, not to mention hopefully useful.
Should quantic mechanics be quantum mechanics? Or is this a sci-fi term you're using for this book?
D'oh! You are correct. Though now I'm tempted to create a new field called "Quantic" studies.
What about quantum studies done underwater? Aquantic Studies!
Greg, I am enjoying the story. Thanks.
I am unsure of your use of the word "penultimate" I know it means next to last, but I'm not sure how it works in the place you used it. I find it a tricky word to use as it sounds like it means the most important and not the next to last.
Anyway, I am enjoying the story and watching your characters come to life.
Thanks, Karen in Minnesota
It's penultimate ;)
Glad you're enjoying the novel!
I’m starting to see the pieces come together. This is my favorite chapter so far.
You have no idea how much this comment simultaneously pleases and confuses me! It pleases me, of course, because you’re enjoying it. It confuses me because this chapter caused me all sorts of grief and in full transparency, I’m still not overly happy with it. So then it pleases me again that you like it even though it’s not my personal favorite chapter thus far. Maybe I need to go back and read it again :)
I think I liked it because it brought the science together and I’m beginning to see the big picture and how the characters are interrelated.
You're missing a word or two in this sentence.
“I managed to successfully that size and could harness its gravitational properties.”
Oops. Thanks, Greg. This was a tough chapter to edit as I combined two chapters into one during rewrites. I’m certain there will be a few other unintended goofs :)